Since people were asking, another half finished fic to look over

[sonjajade]

This is the 8 way mashup in Xing the night before Al and Mei's wedding.  WARNING: NSFW and contains lolicon.  Again, BE BRUTAL.  Tell me what you like, what you hate, what needs improvement. 

A/N:  OOC-ness alert.  Riza and Lan Fan would probably NEVAR do this.  Winry strikes me as a closet freak so she might, and Al… well, he’s in Xing now, isn’t he?

“Are you sure this is a good idea?” Ed asked as Mei sat four chairs together, their backs all touching and forming a square.  “I mean…  Hell, I’m pretty sure this just isn’t a good idea.”

“Nonsense!” the girl cried out.  “The Chang clan has participated in this age old game for years!”  She bowed before her half brother, Emperor Ling Yao, who sat in one of the finely upholstered chairs as Mei ushered Al, Ed and Roy to each take a seat.  “Yinyue Yizi is a tradition the night before a couple is to be married!”

Al looked to his bride with a suspicious eye.  “I don’t recall playing this when Ling married Lan Fan…”

Mei trotted over to her soon-to-be husband and kissed him deeply.  When she pulled back she was grinning smugly.  “That’s because his clan is dumb and doesn’t know how to have fun.”

Ling cleared his throat, reminding her that he could have her executed at any time for such a remark.  She bowed before him again, apologizing in Xingese for her transgression, but as soon as she turned back to where Winry and Riza were standing, she made a silly face that caused both women to giggle in spite of themselves.  The Emperor rolled his eyes, though secretly he was glad his little sister disregarded his rank as she did.

“Alright, the rules are this: us girls will walk around the circle of chairs until the music stops.  When it stops, you have to accept the man you’re standing in front of, even if he is not the man you came here with.  After that, you’re expected to please each other to assure Al and I have a long and happy marriage.”  She spun on her heel to find someone to play the traditional song, leaving her friends to talk among themselves.

Riza and Lan Fan looked as if the floor fell out from under them.  Neither were surprised to see their male counterparts smirking like the lecherous asses they were.  Alphonse Elric was blushing so hard that his face threatened to catch fire.  Some bachelor party! He thought to himself.  What if I have to… touch Winry?! His mind panicked.

“Again I ask, are you sure this is a good idea?” Edward inquired as he rubbed his now sweating palms against the borrowed silk pants Mei provided him with.  He looked at Winry.  “Are you alright with this, Win?”

Winry blinked then scrunched her face up in thought.  “I think it’ll be alright.  Don’t take it personally if I end up with Al.”

Ed closed his eyes, struggling not to explode at the thought of his brother touching his wife, took a deep breath, and exhaled, “Alright.”  He chuckled as he smacked his brother’s arm, who was seated at his left.  “You sure you’re gonna be okay, Al?  I mean, this isn’t exactly your kind of thing.”

Al stammered, “I-I promised Mei I would be open to all of her family’s culture and traditions, no matter how… bizarre.”

Roy laughed.  “My mother told me her people had some very different ways from the west.  How was I to know my heritage is to blame for my perverted disposition!”  He caught Riza’s eye.  “Tell me what’s going on in your head, Riza.  I can see in your eyes you’re unsure about all this.”

Riza answered him, “While I am positive this is uncalled for, I know it means a lot to you to be able to participate in the traditions of your mother’s world.  It means a lot to me that I am able to share the experience with you, regardless of my trepidation.”  His face broke into a sweet smile, and she read ‘I love you’ in the look he gave her.  He read ‘This is a one time thing’ in her gaze.

“Is this your first time playing this game Lan Fan?” Winry asked, recalling that it wasn’t played before the imperial wedding.  The woman quietly nodded.

“There were too many people involved in the royal ceremony to do such a thing.  Mei is a minor princess, the equivalent of a high class aristocrat in Amestris.  She can choose what traditions are followed and abandoned.  My Lord and I did not have that luxury at our ceremony.”  While Lan Fan wasn’t really thrilled with the idea of being with another man, she knew her Lord and husband would be an avid participant, and if he decreed they should play, then she would do as he said.

Mei finally returned with a small band of three musicians, all carrying their instruments behind a large lacquered folding screen.  The sound of Mei barking in Xingese was soon drowned out by the sounds of the players tuning themselves to play in harmony.  The petite girl rejoined the group and said, “Alright girls, go stand in front of your love and give them a kiss before we begin.”

The four of them filed around to stand in front of the men they came with; Winry in front of Ed, Riza in front of Roy, Lan Fan in front of Emperor Ling, and Mei in front of Al, the happy couple whose wedding was set for tomorrow afternoon.  Mei bent down first, giving Al a tender kiss that spoke of her love for him, a promise that even if she didn’t end up with him tonight, she would never love another.  Winry giggled as Ed kept pecking her on the lips, dozens of short smooches that were loud and playful.  Riza planted a single, wet kiss to Roy’s throat, and Ling practically swallowed Lan Fan’s tongue with a deep soul kiss that left everyone panting.  With a playful pat to his favorite wife’s ass, Ling announced, “Let’s get this started, Mei.”

The girl looked at the band and nodded, and the court musicians began to play.  The women walked around the men, Mei and Lan Fan dancing the traditional steps as Riza and Winry tried and failed horribly to imitate them.  The men in the circle anxiously awaited the abrupt end of the song, wondering which of the women they would end up with.  The girls were giggling and really enjoying their ceaseless traipsing around the circle, so when the music stopped all the sudden, they didn’t stop right away.  Mei started barking out in Xingese, then common tongue, telling the girls to stop.  She looked to see who fate had put her with, and Roy’s dark eyes went wide.

“Uhh… hi, Mei,” he said as a trickle of sweat rolled down the side of his face.

She shook her head.  “I’m of age Mr. Flames, you can wipe that look of fear off your face.”  She looked up to find out who was with Al, finding it was Riza.  Winry stood before a grinning Ling, and Ed was looking up at Lan Fan with a devilish smirk.

“Seems right that the two of us with our automail should end up together.”  He reached out and touched her hand.  “I’m kinda excited now.”  Lan Fan blushed deeply and looked away from him.

Mei clapped her hands together and jumped up and down, squealing.  “Alright, what are you waiting for!?  Let’s bless this wedding!!”

Roy’s heart was about to jackhammer out of his chest.  Mei was just a kid!!  It might be alright for Al to be with her because they were only about three or four years apart in age.  Roy was more than twice her age.  He was old enough to be her father.  When she straddled his lap he thought he might faint.  He shut his eyes praying that he was dreaming, that he really wasn’t going to take pleasure in bringing a barely pubescent girl to her own orgasm…  He felt Mei lean forward and nibble his ear, and then she whispered, “You’re in Xing…  You get to play by our rules now, and I am more than ‘legal’ as you say.”  As she spoke, her tiny hand drifted slowly down his chest and into his lap where she showed him just how much of a grown woman she was.

To his right, Roy heard the sound of Winry giggling just as Mei began to unwrap him from the silken pants he was wearing, and he turned his head to find Ling practically devouring her throat with one hand on a perfect tit and the other on a perfect cheek of her ass.  He looked back to the raven haired girl in his lap.  A puff of warm air blew across the tip of his twitching maleness and he shuddered.  Mei gave him a wicked grin, “Now don’t moan too loudly, or else the others might get distracted.”  She opened her mouth wide and took him down, down, down…  He bit his lip and looked to his left, Lan Fan staring at Ed with soft, wondrous eyes as he sucked her metal fingers into her mouth.  Obviously Ed’s time spent with an automail arm had given him some kind of perspective on what sensations he liked, and he was sharing it with the Empress.  He watched as Lan Fan’s nervous features softened and then relaxed, and then she finally allowed her eyes to flutter shut, and she quietly slid her other hand to his chest, tugging gently at the toggles.

Roy gasped as he felt Mei’s small hands wrapping around him, embracing not only his length but the sack below, and he was the first to let out his sound of pleasure.  She looked up at him and gave him a wink, and then she began to blow him with gusto.

Al’s face went red…  “I see Mei hasn’t wasted any time,” he said quietly.  Riza’s nervousness subsided for a moment as she felt the need to console the boy.  She cupped his cheek and reassured him that it was only a cultural thing, that she would never (if she knew what was good for her) replace him with Mustang.

“Besides,” she said with a soft smile, “Isn’t revenge the best thing for something like this?”  She sat herself in his lap gently, and kissed him softly on the mouth, his face reddening even further.  “Come on, Al,” she goaded with a grin.  “Show me how you youngsters do it.”

“Miss Riza…” he murmured, “have you heard of tantric style?”

She gave him a funny look.  “You two have that kind of patience?”

Al actually chuckled, his face looking a little less embarrassed.  “Well, not always, but most of the time that’s what we do.  Have you ever done it that way?”  Nervously, the hand not supporting her back slid up to caress a silk covered breast.  Riza blinked at his sure touch and felt the beginnings of want brewing in her belly.  She shook her head no, and he said gently, “Then allow me to give you a demonstration.”

Al began to breathe deeply and slowly, his hands running down and under the side splits of the silken dress Riza was wearing, and removing her lacy panties.  He asked her to stand up, and he freed his maleness from his pants, but did not otherwise disrobe.  Holding his half erect cock with a steady hand, he guided her to sit down and take him in.

“Al…” she whispered as his hand came down slowly to her quickly hardening clit, “Aren’t you worried I’ll get pregnant?”  He shook his head.  “But what if-”

“You won’t, the women all had special drinks tonight; drinks that will prevent such a thing.  Now, if we’re to do this right, you must breathe with me, slow and deep, and look only into my eyes, no matter what happens, no matter what you feel.”  His hands gripped the soft skin of her hips and he felt himself slowly growing inside of her, the familiarity of this ritual calming his nerves and the want to show his friend a new way to make love fueling his desire.

To his right, Ed had moved on from sucking at Lan Fan’s fingers to slowly licking up her arm.

Comments

[bay115.livejournal.com]

Just to be sure, everyone is in the same room? I kinda thought each couple will be in separate rooms, lol.

One thing I'm trying to figure out is the POV. Having eight separate POVs in third person omniscient POV IS going to be quite messy. On the other hand, it might work for this kind of story as everyone is in the same room. I don't know. XD

[sonjajade.livejournal.com]

They are all in the same room. There are 4 chairs arranged in a circle, their backs all touching and making a + shape. It's musical chairs! but instead of scrambling to get a chair, the girls accept a new partner, whomever it is that they are standing in front of when the music stops.

[seta-suzume.livejournal.com]

I agree with you about Winry being a closet freak. XD

I'm not much a critique giver, so I apologize that I'm not sure I can provide much feedback of that sort, but a few general thoughts:

-this is still a fascinating scenario!
-nice to see precautions were taken against pregnancy
-I can see the difficulty in getting Lan Fan and Riza to participate in this...But you didn't have them just going for it, you seem to have considered the thought processes that led to them deciding to get involved

[sonjajade.livejournal.com]

I like the premise but I think maybe I should just start over. The whole thing just doesn't feel right to me. But thank you for commenting on it!

[bay115.livejournal.com]

If you feel you need to start over, may I suggest doing it with one POV, perhaps Al? For instance, Al will glimpse once in a while how the other "couples" are doing while satisfying Riza. Perhaps even snatching ideas from them, lol. This is just a suggestion though!

[seta-suzume.livejournal.com]

You're welcome (well, I was asking about it, so it just wouldn't have been polite not to :)).